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The Jar Atop of Mine by ~Crowofthepast:iconCrowofthepast:

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In an empty thought
Torn away from pain
A timid girl looms across time
In a jar atop above mine
Without the pain she smiles
In the end she will frown
Because she will forget to remember
That jars can be so brittle
The jar holding now starts to splinter
With this empty thought she becomes just as fragile
She will never forget to remember
Knowing this jar has shattered
But if it helps her the jar was mine
©2006-2009 ~Crowofthepast
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~Crowofthepast:iconCrowofthepast: Mar 15, 2006, 10:37:57 PM
thank you... :P

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Damnit I will not be stifled by your dumbass words...
=nightfall8705:iconnightfall8705: Mar 15, 2006, 10:43:12 PM
told you. :+fav:

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Love is a divine accident, and is the greatest of all things in life. :batty:

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If your will is unyielding, there is nothing you cannot do.
~Crowofthepast:iconCrowofthepast: Mar 15, 2006, 10:44:29 PM
P: i think it is ok. what do you think?

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Damnit I will not be stifled by your dumbass words...
=nightfall8705:iconnightfall8705: Mar 15, 2006, 11:00:18 PM
i think it is wonderful. however, it seems to convey a certain emotion, and i loved it. but to me, it also seems dark. you should amplify that feeling a little more. LOOOOOOVED it!! XD

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Love is a divine accident, and is the greatest of all things in life. :batty:

♥ =K-D-C ♥

The bridge of salvation is never so far that it cannot be reached.
If your will is unyielding, there is nothing you cannot do.
~wilder3:iconwilder3: Mar 15, 2006, 11:01:51 PM
Very well written Yes.

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~thelamingtonqueen:iconthelamingtonqueen: Mar 16, 2006, 5:41:24 AM
lovely :D

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~Crowofthepast:iconCrowofthepast: Mar 16, 2006, 8:14:13 AM
thank you P:

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Damnit I will not be stifled by your dumbass words...
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